Where were you this morning? I know it was early and still pitch black outside and everything, but how is that different from any other weekday?
Anyways.
We have a kick-ass beginning. The ending is... there, but there is this issue with the middle, which .... isn't.
OK, yes, fine - there is a spattering of scenes. They need to connect to each other. Preferably in a slightly logical manner.
Awaiting your input (with chocolates!),
-WL
p.s. - Please poke Mystery Girl and remind her that she only has until Wednesday to fess up to her name. After that she gets to be Mystery Girl for all of November and all the other characters are going to laugh at her.
p.p.s. - Please make her understand that I am quite serious about that.
